July 20, 2012

Bully - Five Sentence Fiction

In this challenge, you have to write five sentences based on the prompt given at Lillie McFerrin Writes visit the site for more details.

Lillie McFerrin Writes
Five Sentence Fiction: Scarlet via lilliemcferrin.com

Bully

My dearest love, long gone and forgotten by everyone. 

The remnants of her  life scattered throughout the room help me to not forget. 

a slender form nestled in the cotton sheets soaked in scarlet. The wound on her wrist,self inflicted; with assistance from the bullies. 

The rage resurfaces, a fresh wound, oozing heartache; an ache that can only be quenched when the names on the list are no more.

11 comments:

  1. Thank you for linking up with FSF this week! This story is incredibly sad, but something that hits home for me. Bullies are a huge problem, with far reaching effects. Powerful piece!!

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  2. Thank you. I'm hoping to participate each week. It's a great way to get my creativity going.

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  3. Revenge...bullies beware! Welcome to FSF!!

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  4. Whoa! Love this! What a dark and emotional piece. You could easily make it longer if you wanted.

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  5. My comment disappeared, so you may get it twice. Not sure.

    I love this! It's raw and dark and emotional. You easily could make it a longer piece if you wanted to.

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  6. Such a powerful piece on so many levels. The suicide, the scourge that is bullying and ending with the theme of revenge. You packed an amazing amount of stuff in this piece and you did it with great skill. Outstanding!

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  7. Painful piece, but so true. Brilliant final sentence!

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  8. From the heartache to the lust for revenge. Very powerful stuff beautifully written.

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  9. Thank you to all the wonderful comments. Much appreciated.

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  10. Turning expertly from loss to vengeance. Nice work.

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  11. Yes...powerful, sad, horrible. A well done commentary on a type of cruelty that needs to stop. Bullying has the spotlight now--I only hope that solutions to this rampant and grotesque problem are put in place...and that lives are saved-both physically and mentally.

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